Fangala the Flying Feline

Hi, there! Another nice chapter, but I thought it was stiff. It seems like you lost the flow of previous chapters when you got to the shelter, but don't worry. ...

Critique time! This is beautiful. You have fresh, vivid, intriguing imagery, but I wonder what this is about? Does this describe the lives of all children? A special group of ...

Great! I love the happy-go-lucky Huck Finn style narrative. The stanzas are pleasantly irrelevant, flow well, and are a pleasure to read. Don't worry about the capitalization. Have you read ...

Wow. What a talented storyteller you are! This was one of the most interesting things I've ever read on this site. For the first half, I couldn't tell if Ayal ...

Lovely poem. You have some strong and unexpected lines, such as: No one told me I had wings Powerful opening. It makes the reader wonder how the narrator could have ...

Beautiful! So short, so sweet, so poetic! Usually it's not recommended to talk about poetry in poetry, but you pulled it off in your first line. It vanishes so quickly; ...

Again, good job. The dialogue between Isabelle and Anya is stiff. It seems like they make peace too fast. One second they hate each other and the next they're spilling ...

Review time! “How may I help you?” she asked with a wide smile. “She’s going to be staying here,” my dad roughly said, straightening the tie on his suit. “Oh, ...

No problems here. Fantastic as always, but you might want to add more dialogue. Also, I'd like to see a detailed description of the setting. You have good descriptions of ...

God, I can't believe nobody's raving about this yet! This is hilarious... in a dark way. Is that what you were aiming for? In any case, it's brilliant. Oddly enough, ...

Bravo! You continue to astound me. One quick thing: I would expect Isabelle to have a more extreme reaction when Carl corners her by her locker. I mean, wasn't it ...

Indeed, a weird dream. Weird in that it's so realistic. I understand the difficulties of writing a perfectly balanced dream, not too funky and not too down-to-earth. You might consider ...

Perfect. I have almost no problems or nit-picks. Your opening is strong, but slightly unbelievable. Three years old? Then again, if you're aiming for perverted, you're right on target. Also, ...

Hurray for Snoink! And hurray for e.e. cummings! (Personally, I adore the lower case style.) As for the poem: lovely. Normally, exclamation marks should be used sparingly, but this is ...

Actually, emma, I think this is a very nice poem! The important thing is that is comes from the heart; when you spill your passion into your poetry, it rubs ...